Looking to improve my promo game and wasn't sure if this was taboo or not, but I figured if publicly asking this is not ok, then my bad!

but, I've been promoing and feeling out what my character is and how to naturally progress him while alternatively promoing competitively and seeing what works and what doesn't but haven't really been asking for direct help or critiques for how to do this thing (This is my first time in an e-fed like this. I did a dice rolling e-fed in like 2008 but man that was all luck) 

Anyway, Just looking to hear from folks who have read my promos, to see if I can get any feedback on what they believe I'm doing wrong and should change, or what I'm doing right and keep  Don't hold back, I'm a good sport, and I'm in it for the long hall and I'm here to learn!

Bumping Uglies with your mother.

Can I suggest you this thread ?
https://eawnetwork.forumotion.com/t4403-like-and-dislike-promo-edition

If you answer. You will have an answer for your promos.