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Anthony Leonhart Voltage
Posts : 1818 Age : 33 Hailing From : New Japan Wrestling Academy Status : #IchimichiZaibatsuCorporation
| Subject: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 4:46 am | |
| The title says it all. Let the game begin. |
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The Mexican Samurai Dynasty
Posts : 1136 Age : 33 Hailing From : San Jose, California Status : Don't Call It A Comeback
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 4:54 am | |
| Like: You have a very inventive character, and I like the amount of attention you play into the flaws of your character, he comes across as very unlikable.
Dislike: I feel as though you are so in your character and development that you don't focus enough on your opponent. You only pick at your opposition with a brief paragraph or two but that might be because you don't know much about them, that will probably solve itself as you become more invested into the fed. |
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Anthony Leonhart Voltage
Posts : 1818 Age : 33 Hailing From : New Japan Wrestling Academy Status : #IchimichiZaibatsuCorporation
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 5:16 am | |
| - Alex Wilder wrote:
- Like: You have a very inventive character, and I like the amount of attention you play into the flaws of your character, he comes across as very unlikable.
Dislike: I feel as though you are so in your character and development that you don't focus enough on your opponent. You only pick at your opposition with a brief paragraph or two but that might be because you don't know much about them, that will probably solve itself as you become more invested into the fed. Small details in the promo can make great things. And you're right about I don't know the competition very well for the moment but I will work on this of course. |
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『zakkii』 Empire
Posts : 6357 Age : 32 Hailing From : WKWKWK Land Status : 『Whatever tomorrow brings, I'll be there!』
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 5:31 am | |
| - Alex Wilder wrote:
- Like: You have a very inventive character, and I like the amount of attention you play into the flaws of your character, he comes across as very unlikable.
Dislike: I feel as though you are so in your character and development that you don't focus enough on your opponent. You only pick at your opposition with a brief paragraph or two but that might be because you don't know much about them, that will probably solve itself as you become more invested into the fed. Like: Your promos are spot on, from what I get when I fought you, you are successfully put my feelings to a rollercoaster. That's a good thing, tbh. Dislike: well, I guess what's lacking in you is just a character development. You're doing great while we still connected and hopefully Kora will do things in this section. You made a good start between you and Kora few weeks ago. |
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Anthony Leonhart Voltage
Posts : 1818 Age : 33 Hailing From : New Japan Wrestling Academy Status : #IchimichiZaibatsuCorporation
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 6:55 am | |
| Like : Long, clean promos. Love the presentation, very well done.
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Marco Voltage
Posts : 1863 Age : 30 Hailing From : Lexington, Kentucky Status : Blah Blah Blah
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 9:48 am | |
| Like: Your promos feel fluent and natural like it matches the gimmick or your personality of your character. To me the things you say is believable and what I mean by that is that I can see your character actually saying those things if he was talking to me. Your promos also don't feel forced at all and on top of that it's presented well.
Dislike: Pretty much what mexi said but that can be solved later in the promo battle once you get a handle of your opponents character. Also to note that it isn't always a bad thing because sometimes you'll have opponents that you don't really have much to say and it happens to literally everyone. |
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Victor Maero Dynasty
Posts : 503 Age : 23 Hailing From : Missouri Status : How many licks does it take to get to the center of my heart?
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 10:03 pm | |
| Like: I like how your pic base works so well with your gimmick. You sound so hyped to be here in your promos. I'm a huge fan of Babyfaces, they just get to me man. Your character comes out really well in your promos and I hope to see WAY more of you in the near future.
Dislike: Just that massive blocks of text need to be broken down a little bit, it makes it way easier to read. I try my best to keep dialog into digestible chunks but it's hard man, so I really don't blame you. |
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Phoenix Winterborn
Posts : 521 Age : 43 Hailing From : The Windy City of Chicago, Illinois Status : Round 2.
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 10:45 pm | |
| Like: You have a really well thought out character, and it shows in your promos. It makes it that much more believeable.
Dislike: More of a pet peeve thing cause I used to do it too, but the overall layout of your promos just grinds at me. Like, how you have so much story/setup and not quite enough actual promo. It leaves a bit to be desired on my end. |
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Nobi Showdown
Posts : 2134 Age : 30 Hailing From : Indonesia
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 10:49 pm | |
| Like: The way you developed your character on promo page is a top notch. Very realistic
Dislike: not so sure how to say this (apologize if I make a rude statement) but once in a while you seems lack of confidence when (again, sorry) your opponent cut better promo than you. Should have keep your heads up. |
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Kurt_Burton
Posts : 221 Age : 41
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 23rd 2016, 11:43 pm | |
| Like: You are passionate and that shines through in the character. You are very clear about who Nobi is. And the dummies as a signature taunt is cool. Dislike: Some of your promos are hard to read due to word choice and grammar. I am pretty sure you said English is not your first language, so just keep at it and that should get better. |
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Mstislav Voltage
Posts : 2662 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 12:46 am | |
| Like: Burton is kind of like Kenny Drake in a regard as their both adaptable in any situation. You've been able to prove that on the page especially this week against Borg. Love the character and what you're doing with it
Dislike: I thoroughly enjoy your promos and can't find anything to dislike yet. Keep it up man. |
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Diamond Cutter
Posts : 78 Age : 28 Hailing From : Northwestern University
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 1:30 am | |
| Like: Your character is genuine to the point where "Aren Mstislav" is a gimmick of it's own. I feel that you're able to tap into all of the elements of a heel: old school tactics, dark messages, brashness, anti-authority if needed. That kind of versatility is great as you can play nearly any role in any storyline.
Dislike: Sometimes your sentences are a little wordy. You get the message across just fine, but there might be a shorter, more concise, and more powerful way to say it. Otherwise...well...you're the champion for a reason. |
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AJ Perez
Posts : 246 Age : 26 Hailing From : Copenhagen, Denmark Status : Singing Bobby Roode's Theme Song
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 6:16 am | |
| Like: Your promos are not too long and not too small. Just how I like em Dislike: Blue is my least favourite colour |
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Nasir Escobar Dynasty
Posts : 3316 Age : 28 Hailing From : Brick City BITCH~! Status : If you don’t like your destiny, don’t accept it. Instead, have the courage to change it the way you want it to be~!
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 12:28 pm | |
| like: Your promos feel extremely natural and fun for you.
dislike: You could have less paragraphs, but lengthen the paragraphs you do have. |
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Anthony Leonhart Voltage
Posts : 1818 Age : 33 Hailing From : New Japan Wrestling Academy Status : #IchimichiZaibatsuCorporation
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 12:33 pm | |
| Like : Enzo feels to it. Dislike : How could hate Enzo-like promos ? |
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Rattik
Posts : 152 Age : 28 Hailing From : Fort Wayne, IN Status : Now Residing in Cleveland, OH
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 12:41 pm | |
| Like: How you are able to build character development, while saying what you need/want to say. Makes it flow and a good read. Dislike: IDK haha, if I had to say something for you to grow, I would say sometimes you get wordy when you try to find the medium between psycho and a wrestler if that makes since. I struggle with it as well. But I thorowly enjoy reading you promos. |
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Ryan Marx Showdown
Posts : 308 Age : 37 Hailing From : London, England Status : Deceased
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 1:17 pm | |
| Like: from the couple promos I've seen, you're very detailed and descriptive, which really helps to visualise the promo and your character. As someone who likes a good amount of detail and description so that I can better visualise and understand what I'm reading, I really like the style that you've used for your first couple of promos. Also like the way Rattik refers to himself in third person, it's different from other styles I've personally seen here, and whilst it's a small touch, it's a good addition to the character.
Dislike: so far, I haven't seen anything to dislike yet. You haven't cut many promos here in EAW, but from what I've seen you've got a good style and approach going. All I can say is keep it up, and keep developing your character to make your promos better and better. |
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AJ Perez
Posts : 246 Age : 26 Hailing From : Copenhagen, Denmark Status : Singing Bobby Roode's Theme Song
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 1:59 pm | |
| Like: I like your characters promos because I think you are very good at playing an intelligent guy in your promos Dislike: You use the colour blue as your colour. Blue is my least favourite colour |
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Azumi Goto Empire
Posts : 3679 Age : 27 Hailing From : Orlando, Florida Status : If you fall, be able to stand up on your own. And if you can do that, you're Unbreakable!
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 3:07 pm | |
| Like: It seems you know character really well and it seems who enjoy writing promos.
Dislike: I know this coming from me and I suffer a little bit from it. But I think should have less paragraph or increase the length of the paragraph. |
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ᴍᴏɴɪᴄᴀ ᴠᴀᴜɢʜᴀɴ .
Posts : 409 Age : 34 Hailing From : MA ✈ TN Status : fєєlín' vαughαntαstíc !
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 3:19 pm | |
| Like: Love your style of promoing. It has influnced me in my Brody promos. Dislike: Coding is basic but im a HTML nerd so my opinion on that doesnt matter. I just like presentation a lot. |
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『zakkii』 Empire
Posts : 6357 Age : 32 Hailing From : WKWKWK Land Status : 『Whatever tomorrow brings, I'll be there!』
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 4:54 pm | |
| Like: neat formatting, really pulling people to grab their attention on your promos and read it. I wish I can make a beautiful formattting and coloring like you.
Dislike: can't tell anything with this char but I'll give a comment about your other char instead. I don't know, it might just me but everything Brody said is a little bit too explicit. You know, like cutting, stabbing, all that stuff. |
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Azumi Goto Empire
Posts : 3679 Age : 27 Hailing From : Orlando, Florida Status : If you fall, be able to stand up on your own. And if you can do that, you're Unbreakable!
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 4:58 pm | |
| Like: Your promos have great storytelling since it mixes the 'monologue' style and the 'scene' style.
Dislike: I really hate red font on a black background. |
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Nasir Escobar Dynasty
Posts : 3316 Age : 28 Hailing From : Brick City BITCH~! Status : If you don’t like your destiny, don’t accept it. Instead, have the courage to change it the way you want it to be~!
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 5:41 pm | |
| Like: You do the scene promos which I used to do ALL the time back in the day (it's like we are connected or somethin)
Dislike: It makes me realize how bleh my promos were back then (and btw I liked that paragraph promo you cut like A LOT, I would try a mix of the two if I were you) |
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Nobi Showdown
Posts : 2134 Age : 30 Hailing From : Indonesia
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 6:40 pm | |
| Like: Entertaining promos all around, I just love it.
Dislike: TBH, nothing at the moment, you are on my top 10/15 fav promoers atm. Keep it up. |
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『zakkii』 Empire
Posts : 6357 Age : 32 Hailing From : WKWKWK Land Status : 『Whatever tomorrow brings, I'll be there!』
| Subject: Re: Like and Dislike (Promo Edition) July 24th 2016, 7:40 pm | |
| Like: you somehow got the charismatic side of yours. You are seem able to counter every words your opponent has to say about you pretty much accurately.
Dislike: well, maybe the matter of word choice. You need to expand your vocabulary even more. |
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