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Hmmm...pull back on the ideas and focus. I feel like your character has a lot of stellar ideas but you are trying to do them all at once during your promos at times. Try to let yourself focus on them one at a time.

do we have this thread before?

@ Eclipse: hmm...perhaps you could make cinematic style promos? I feel like you can use them in your promos. Just make it stay on the topic when you want to do it. This is just me trying to give you an advice anyway, since you are a great promoer in all honesty.

@Haruna: Hmm, when you try to make cinematic style promos, you could be out of topic sometimes (NOT always). It's not that I hate cinematic style promos (see my advice to Eclipse lol) but I feel like you are so much better as a straight-type promoer (which you are). Other than that, you are already great. Oh yes... try to grow some confidence...

I think it would be great to see the life of Nobi with a scene promo. Plus I think giving your character some Character development would be nice.

Punctuation and keenness on using IWC terminology like 'jobber' and whatnot are your two biggest hurdles right now. Surmount them and your promos will improve even more.

I would love to see a glance into Carson's past.

I feel like your promos would improve if we see your good nature clash with the darkness of the Sanatorium.

Maybe even give one promo all to Oz. Like it's from his POV. Like most dark gimmicks I want to know about your character past.

I think that you need to go a little more in depth with the points that you're trying to make, it'll add a whole lot more to your promos as a whole

I think you need to give that Charlotte pic base back to Queen La Diva
#LegendLaDiva

Also, your promos to me seem just fine.

I think your promos leave a lot to be desired in the insults category. A little generic in the burn category for my taste. You don't have to call people waffle irons or anything that drastic, just spice it up a bit.

Sometimes when you do story promos I have no idea if it's development for you or another character whenever there is someone else of Sanatorium involved. I know what you're going for, but it seems as if you're character is playing support in his own promo when you have other sanatorium members in it.

Stop being so damn amazing or else Voltage/Oasis will have no choice but to make you the face of EAW.

While I have stated it several time that I miss you as Killswitch The Joker, I'm starting to think that Lannister is indeed your best work. So my advice to you is....just try to post your promos as much as you can. I'm always looking forward to read your promos since CWF/ACWF days. Again...I miss Joker, lol.

You really seem like the underdog most of the times. You could really work a little on Nobi's character, like what is his past, what made him what he is today. Things like that. In rest it seems you are pretty fine, I have to say that I am enjoying your promo's quite a bit more than I expected.

My advice to you would be to just proofread and read out your promos, as I sometimes see some obvious mistakes, be they grammar or spelling mistakes. And whilst you do go into depth with some of your promos and descriptions, I feel like you could try to show some deeper development of your character, maybe give us some more solid information about him and the ideologies you mention. Don't give everything away quickly, but tell us more about him and why he is the way he is so that people reading can understand him a bit more.

I don't have much for you in the way of quality.  I would say use the Gif thing a bit more sparingly so it does not become played out... and I hate blue text on a black background.  Although it is a light blue, I still hate it.

In my opinion I think you're doing a stellar job so far. I try to keep up with everyone's promos but my advice for you would be to find ways to evolve your character more or something of that nature.

Your promos are generally good, and not a lot I could say to improve them. Perhaps try to space things out and expand on certain subjects if at all possible.

Try to extend your promos longer by talking about each topic more

Don't stop being amazing.

You have a good grasp on your character, but I think I agree with what Eclipse said: you have all these ideas that you're trying to do at the same time. Focus on one of them at the time and you see things become a lot easier.

presentation no offense but it just like a wall of text